Theo's workshop

Hi here I will post my songs
Feel free to coment anything
And if possible give me some tips
Somke of they might be in Hymmnos
*Consult here for more information
http://conlang.wikia.com/wiki/Hymmnos
Anyway i will began with this one:

To the Sun Arising

(2x)
To the sun arising,
Bringing an endless dream.

The darkness over my eyes is vanishing,
Showing me that the world I was living in
Was a lie.
Hey, let the shadow disappear!

The bright rays
Come over the horizon.
A shining day is coming,
Hey! Let's be happy today!

Come with me,
to the sun!

To the sun arising,
Bringing an endless dream.

The world I was living in
Was only a illusion, nothing more.
Now the truth is destroying it
And the sun is rising once again.

Come with me,
to the sun!

I will let the sun shine into my world!

Now I can face the truth
Because you made me strong.
I will let the sun rise again
Letting the truth appear once again.
Hey! Let's be happy today!
To the sun arising,
Bringing an endless dream.

(Whispers)Why?
Because I can!

To the sun arising,
Bringing an endless dream

Baby come with me!

To the sun arising,
Bringing an endless dream.

To the sun!

To the sun arising,
Bringing an endless dream.

Yeah, Yeah!

To the sun arising,
Bringing an endless dream.

Come with me
to the sun!

I hope you like~~~~~

Here is other XD:
Let's shine today!

"Hey come on, let's shine today"

Everyday I wake up with the gentle sunlight
When I notice,
It's already time to go to the school
A new day has began.

I look to the clouds in the sky
And my mind fly together with the birds
Imagining lots of things
I go to everywhere

When the things look to be normal,
I notice that they have changed,
The days are not like before anymore
I shall never be alone in the darkness again
Because now I have those who are precious to me
They are always with me.

I shall shine today!

The long days when I was alone,
They are in the past,
Those sad days shall be covered
By the new happy days

The sun shine in the sky
The breeze that I feel,
Brings a new sensation.

When the things look to be normal,
I notice that they have changed,
The days are not like before anymore
I shall never be alone in the darkness again
Because now I have those who are precious to me
They're always with me.

I found the strength to change in myself
The eyes that looked to a sad past,
Shall turn to the bright future,
I know I can do it!

Now I feel the joy of being alive,
I can see the true colors of the world
I don't just live,
I live every time as if it was the last.

When the things look to be normal,
I notice that they have changed,
The days are not like before anymore
I shall never be alone in the darkness again
Because now I have those who are precious to me
They're always with me.

I shall shine today!

I shall never be alone again
Because now I found the ones that are precious to me
"Even if our bodies are distant"
And we are connected through this world only tree
"Our hearts are connected"

The strength was always there,
Within myself
I shall not wait anymore
And make everything be the way I wish it to
I know I can to it
I know I will do it.

I shall live intensely
And become light for those who are in darkness
I shall shine today!